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7/20/2008 5:33:02 AM
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deardiary
Posts 244
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Anyone written any good poems or short stories that they want to share??
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Why is life so difficult?
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7/29/2008 5:42:32 AM
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deardiary
Posts 244
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tears and sorrow drown my life,
black runs down my cheeks.
after years and years of pain with you,
i have nothing left to do.
it pains me to say but,
you were the worst thing to happen to me
i drown in puddles,
it rains down on me.
the black clouds that cover my life
pour precipitation on my head.
second attempt at poems.. not very skilled at writing these, so i think ill stop trying now lol
as the clouds began to cover the sun,
i wondered,
was this the end?
All my friends,
Gone,
All my hopes,
Shattered.
Tiny fragments of happiness began to dissolve,
In the black pool of hatred.
sorrow began to engulf my thoughts,
colour faded,
as everything turned black,
the pain that i felt all over my body,
was the only thing that felt real,
worthless,
worthless,
worthless,
the only word that I could find to describe myself.
my poems. what do you think?
*loves constructive criticism*
edited by deardiary on 7/29/2008
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Why is life so difficult?
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7/30/2008 1:02:33 AM
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moderator
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Hey deardiary,
Not very skilled? You obviously don't know how good you are! Those were some excellent poems. They definitely read like they were truly from the heart. I like the dark angle to them as well. Excellent job and thank you very much for sharing!!! 
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8/9/2008 10:10:14 PM
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black_haru
Posts 497
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They are sooo cool! The second one is the best one. I love the discription. It's lovely!
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8/9/2008 10:15:52 PM
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black_haru
Posts 497
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Heres my awful awful poem (I have absaloutly nooo talent in this! None watsoever!)'
There invisible
invisible claws
ripping through me
through my heart
It's hard to breath
It's hard to move
It's hard to scream
The claws dig deeper
my hearts is in shreads
every word you say
hurts
haha. feel free to reply and laugh at it.
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8/10/2008 1:27:01 AM
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moderator
Posts 105
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Hey haru_the_ox,
It's really not all that bad. The angle I like is that it doesn't rhyme. It sorta goes against the perception many have that poems are only poems if they rhyme, which isn't the case. Anyway, cool deal on sharing. It's not a bad effort at all! 
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8/10/2008 9:33:46 PM
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.Black..Stars..Kill.
Posts 620
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yeah i agree with moderator. All you guys are really good. you should keep writing and throw away that modesty. I really wish that I could write like that.
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Life is a Party. Dance. Bleed. Love it.
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8/22/2008 1:27:21 AM
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cool.chick
Posts 81
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Wow... one thing I'll say about emos, they are creative writers! Really, you guys are awesome!
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The coolest danm chick you'll ever meet! I like fun, getting to know what it means to be "emo", and learning new things. I spend a lot of time at home, so some call me boring. I think I'm cool.
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8/31/2008 12:10:48 PM
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under_pressure
Posts 20
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cool.chick wrote:
Wow... one thing I'll say about emos, they are creative writers! Really, you guys are awesome!
I agree with you. I've been enjoying these writings. It would be cool if there was a section of the website (outside the forums) to feature this kind of stuff. Not eveyrone checks the forums, but more people would check the site content. I think I'll post a suggestion to the mod.
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9/1/2008 12:35:50 AM
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moderator
Posts 105
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Hey, I think that's a great idea UP! Only problem is the aspect of time and actually getting around to do it. My day job has slammed me with work. Still, a great suggestion and one we'll throw on the to-do list.
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6/7/2010 9:34:14 AM
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Bloody doll
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I have alot of poems but this one my fave
My life time is runing .. Out of my control
Tommorow or after .. U will see me daing
Then u'll see my grve .. Try to but roses
But the windblows ,, will take them away 4m me
Even when I'm dead,, life still so hard on me
What do u think??
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10/21/2010 1:44:34 PM
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emmie4eva
Posts 18
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i love all the poems i got one tho
sometimes i feel lost and afraid some time i feel
like i cant get ride of this pain can u help me or
are u going to let me be i need to relize this stuff so i can be free
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11/8/2010 1:57:54 PM
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emmie4eva
Posts 18
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i cant change who u want to be but i wont u to kow am changeing for me u had my love and now u want it agian i dont think so stop acking like a kid ur the oone u heart mine and threw it in the dirt so am tellin u it over and u needd to go find someone who want u more because u hurt me and this will never happen agian
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1/24/2011 10:56:31 AM
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emoangel
Posts 44
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Addicted
im addicted to the way you walk
im addicted to the way you talk
im addicted to your shiny car
im addicted to your shelfish grin
im addicted to your tight embrace
im addicted to every thing about you
im addicted to ...
im addicted to you
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music lives in the heart of everyone not just the stars.
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1/24/2011 10:57:56 AM
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emoangel
Posts 44
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broken glass the love of my life
brings so much pain yet i feal none
what is in a life that is full of lies and bruses
i let the broken glass glide across my skin
beads of scarlet pluming where it crossed
no one can stop me or make the scars dissapear
so i hide what the broken glass left behind
with a shame thats hard to bare
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music lives in the heart of everyone not just the stars.
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2/10/2011 12:40:11 PM
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smileytam
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i got a poem that my friend told me about and its now one of my favourite poems n stuff
Dark Angel of the night
wings of black take flight
sweet angel of the abyss
Deadly love with a lethal kiss
silent angel carry me away
never forget that dying day......
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